User blog comment:RoyboyX/Samus Aran's Mission Log/@comment-3200400-20101117025927

Interesting, the only thing I would recommend is to pay more attention to the setting. I don't know if the way you tell the story fits HOW you tell it. Your writing is mainly event all the way through, so I didn't feel really into it. Just add more setting using colorful words, and you'll probably have a really good story, in my opinion. My rating: 6/10

Only because of what I said above! Thanks for listening!